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For the most part what you have sounds nice. I like the sound design too! Though, there were a couple of things that bothered me:
- Frame 00, Row 30 the chord is rather dissonant because you're playing G# on the bass while implying an A on Pulse 2. Might I suggest changing the bass to an F and changing the A notes on pulse 2 to G#?
- Frame 02, Row 00 the chord is rather weak, likely due to the brief bass note instrument change as well as a missing C# (or less dominant F, up to you) for the harmony.
- Frames 07-0A the harmony is a bit weak here. I think it might help if you raise pulse 2 an octave, lower the volume on it, then make its rhythm a bit more interesting to compliment the overall rhythm of the section.
-Frame 0F-1B really needs a bass, because without one it's difficult to tell what chord you're trying to represent. I like what you have going on at 18-1B, but double-check the notes on the fast arps, because it sounds like it's playing a major scale on a minor chord, creating a strange kind of clashing.
- A couple of irks with the melody (most are personal preferences) I want to point out:
---Frame 05, Row 20 the melody jump here feels a bit unnatural, but then again it could just be my personal preference.
---Frame 06, Row 20-30 the melody (and ultimately, the chord progression) cadences rather weak here... either consider changing it or throwing in a harmony to make it more interesting
---Frame 0A the chord progression also cadences rather weak here too. Consider changing the section here altogether to transition from the previous frame 09 to the next section 0B. If you decide to re-write it, consider putting the focus of the progression on the bassline first, then write the melody, and then the rest of the melodic stuff, all while making it transition from frame 09 and to frame 0B.
Thanks for the feedback! I took your advice and edited most of the song. Frame 02 row 00 wasn't supposed to be a chord at first, but I changed it to a less dominant F which helps. I also added bass where there wasn't really a bass before. I think it sounds better, but if there are still problems, let me know.
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Wow, sounds much better, but the volume is still kind of unbalanced. I made a little edit for you. I just perfectionized your song a little bit. Hope you don't mind!
EDIT: I noticed a small thing i forgot to edit that made the note on frame 02 in Pulse 1 sound like it played twice.
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Wow, I didn't realize that making the FDS a bit quieter could fix the song. Thanks for the edit! I just noticed that the triangle arp instrument didn't loop, small mistake on my part, but I fixed it.
EDIT: It turns out it still didn't loop, so now it does
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Oh, I didn't know the triangle arp instrument was supposed to loop ('cause I'm a total idiot, the instrument name has "arp" in it...), but it sounds better with it looping.
And also, I made the mistake of making the "Horn Thing Melody Short"-instrument that I created sound to "Blippy"... So I just edited that really quickly and also fixed a clashing note problem in the beginning of the song at the same time.
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