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This isn't as horrible as your topic's title made it out to be.
My critique...
Pros: harmony is very good. Notes progress pretty well throughout the track.
Cons: noise channel volume is overpowering. Speed change messes the initial mood of the song. The song itself is still basic/repetitive in style & presentation.
Conclusion: you're getting better in terms of handling your notation, but your style isn't exactly as well-defined as one would expect. You need to improve on volume control, but more importantly, you need to improve on your transitions from one pattern to the next (which is stopping you from breaking the song's repetition).
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The percussion has improved & the syncopation was much needed, but now, for one more thing; I'd recommend using a volume of C for square channel 1 & a volume of A for square channel two, instead of using F for both.
I'm saying this because the squares are also starting to sound a bit too loud when played together. If both channels are at max volume, the result that one would here is the same as one channel with double the maximum volume. That's why I recommend for you to stagger the volume like this.
And sadly, this song doesn't really sound like it would fit a cave theme, in my opinion. I'd say it would sound better as a theme for inside of a shop or house. It also looks like you need to listen to/cover a song or two that actually fit the theme you want.
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[quote=]I'd say it would sound better as a theme for inside of a shop or house. It also looks like you need to listen to/cover a song or two that actually fit the theme you want.[/quote]
I don't really get how this could fit an innocent house... I can kind of see where you're going. I listened to kraids liar and then decided to make this sound a bit like it, Kind of where the triangle idea came from.
I took in what Tech said, plus changed something my self.
[quote=yucca70]I don't really get how this could fit an innocent house... I can kind of see where you're going. I listened to kraids lair and then decided to make this sound a bit like it, Kind of where the triangle idea came from.[/quote]
[quote=danooct1]This sounds wayyyyyyyyyyyy too happy to fit anything close to Kraid's Lair.[/quote]
danooct1's totally right on this; sure, it's perfectly alright to create tunes of any mood, but you have to know when that mood applies. In your case, yucca70, the mood is too positive to be used as a cave theme (that's why I recommended to use it for a house theme; the song actually sounds innocent enough to fit an innocent theme).
The mood you set in any song's important; you can't just create any song & use it for any scenario. Like the idea I told to GlidingSoul; you don't play happy honky tonk piano music during a funeral unless you want the mourners to throw you 6 feet under. Why? Because honky tonk music has a positive mood while the scenario is extremely negative.
If you want to have a song that fits a cave theme, you'll have to make a song that's less repetitive & have a darker tone; why not try covering Kraid's Lair theme? It will be good practice for you when it comes to writing music with different (& especially darker) moods.
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