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Pretty much what Dan said. Also the noise channel is wierd and not Follin-styled at all. Could also use some 12 0, 13 0, 24 0 etc. arpeggio envelope leads (as well as some arpeggios).
Although I do kind of like the melody you use, it's somewhat approaching the Follin-style melodies.