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I've never heard the music from these games before, but you seem to be quite good at making covers. Both this and your "rbi.ftm" cover sound pretty nice.
As for your originals you posted, I honestly don't think they're as bad as you made them out to be. My first suggestion to you would be to try using a different key than C major, but if you just started tracking they're all really good nevertheless.
Oh, and I'm not sure if anyone would have a problem with this, but it's always a good idea to have one post with lots of music as opposed to a few posts with less music in each one.
Keep tracking
Frame #0, row 0A, the notes for Square 1&2 are one row too late.
Frame #0, row 1C, the arpeggio is a bit off.
Frame #1, row 32, Square 2: should be B-3, not C-4.
Frame #2, row 20, Square 2: Should be G-3, not A-3.